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kann mal ein Englisch Experte den Text durchlesen und mich auf gewisse Fehler aufmerksam machen?
wäre nett.

Und bitte keine unnötigen posts.
Das zählt als Teil einer Klausur.
Und da ich in der 13 bin, ist das schon recht wichtig.
Danke:

Nr.5

The text “The Stolen Generations” written by Jane Harrison is about the fate of the Aboriginal population in Australia since the beginning of the 1920s.

The Aboriginal race almost died out and displaced by white people, the Australian government starts a program in 1920 to integrate the Aborigines into the white population.
Stealing thousands of Aboriginal children from their families and integrate them into missions or welfare institutions, the Australian government eliminates the children’s Aboriginality legalized by the welfare law.
They are not allowed to speak their own language anymore, and not to keep on their old tradition. Even the contact with their families is prohibited.
Aboriginal children are hunted and taken away from their families randomly. Most of them are girls, so it is prevented that they bear indigenous babies.
Later on after the 2nd World War, more boys are taken away from their families to avert the increasing of juvenile delinquency.
Many of the children don’t get enough to eat and no proper education. Even many of them are sexually abused.
The effects on the children are dramatic; they suffer psychological damage, are traumatized or become alcoholics. Many of them end up in prison or commit suicide.
Civil right movements demonstrating for minorities rights in the USA 1960, things begin to change for the Aborigine population.
In 1967 the Australian government accepts Aborigines to become Australian citizens with equal rights to vote.
At the end of the 1980s, the population of Australia being informed about the Aborigines fait, there are many people shocked and angry about this scandal.
It is found out, that Aborigines are more often arrested than white men and most time they are arrested for negligible crimes.
In 1999 the Australian Parliament apologizes for the injustice practices of past generations.
For helping Aborigines of the Lost Generations to find their families, an Aboriginal woman and an Australian historian starts an organization.
However now days Aborigines people still suffer from their fate of the past.

Erstmal vorne Weg: Wieso schreibst du den gesamten Text im Simple Present und nicht im Simple Past?
//summary ist immer simple present

"The Aboriginal race almost died out and is displaced by white people, the Australian government starts a program in 1920 to integrate the Aborigines into the white population."
//war vorher korrekt. --> ist eine spezielle Stilart, die die Lehrer mögen.

"Many of the children don’t get enough to eat and no proper education. Also many of them are sexually abused."
//Even stand für sogar...

"Civil right movements demonstrating for minorities rights in the USA 1960, things begin to change for the Aborigine population."

Das hört sich mehr an wie ein Stichpunkt als ein Satz, und macht dadurch irgendwie kaum Sinn.
Ich nehme mal an "Civil right movements" war so eine Initiative damals?: 1960 demonstriert "Civil right movements" für Minderheiten in den USA, die Dinge verändern sich für die australischen Ureinwoher.
-> In den USA wird protestiert, und in Australien ändert sich was. Zusammenhang?
//das war der Auslöser dafür, dass man sich in Australien auch gedanken gemacht hat... - die Änderungen kommen ja in den nächsten Sätzen.


"At the end of the 1980s, the population of Australia being informed about the Aborigines faith, a lot of people are shocked and angry about this scandal."

Achte auf deinen Stil, dieser Teilsatz war ja fürchterlich. ^.^'
//fait - nicht faith - es geht um das Schicksal, nicht dem Glauben. many oder a lot of macht keinen unterschied.

"For helping Aborigines of the Lost Generations (Eigenname? Wenn nicht: klein schreiben) to find their families, an Aboriginal woman and an Australian historian starts (s weg, da es zwei Frauen sind, also Mehrzahl) an organization.
However nowadays Aborigines people still suffer from their fate of the past."
/ja, Eigenname. das s war der erste wirkliche Fehler, danke.

Es würde sich vielleicht anbringen, wenn du sagst, was das für eine Textart ist, da die ja auch bestimmte Merkmale haben. Das ist alles was mir bisher aufgefallen ist. ^^

/€dit Unter mir: Ich hab geschrieben, dass ich nicht weiss welche Textart das ist, deswegen hab ich auch nachgefragt.
//ja, summary.

Also die Sätze die so anfangen:

Digging a hole, Brunos dog found a bone.

sind Stil Mittel.